Monday, December 31, 2012

Reality...

He said, she denied
He was empty, she was regretful
He was begging, she was praying
He was tearful, she was crying

He was before, she was after
He was hoping, she was mourning
He couldn't stop, she couldn't move
He was mad, she was sad

He wants to watch, she wants to hide
Everything in LOVE
Which is neither a dream
Nor a reality.


 
Posted by Ruchi Jain at 8:11 AM

23 comments:

  1. Brian MillerDecember 31, 2012 at 10:58 AM

    really an interesting verse....both sides...the last three lines really make this for me....ha, it is neither...

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  2. JulesDecember 31, 2012 at 12:34 PM

    Thanks for visiting my piece 'Oddments' written for The Sunday Whirl Wordle word list.

    The last stanza does sum up love and life.
    Continue learning to make your reality the best it can be.

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  3. SandyCarlsonDecember 31, 2012 at 6:50 PM

    This is great. It makes me think of the feeling of being disconnected.

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  4. Betsy Banks AdamsDecember 31, 2012 at 7:01 PM

    Hi, Thanks for visiting my blog. Please visit anytime. I enjoyed your poem--but it didn't make me think of LOVE... There are differences in all of us --and when in a relationship, YES--there will be differences, but not that many.... Not sure that is a relationship which will work....

    Happy 2013.
    Hugs,
    Betsy

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  5. AnonymousJanuary 1, 2013 at 12:30 AM

    A lovely piece of writing.

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  6. Saru SinghalJanuary 1, 2013 at 8:19 AM

    Profound work in simple words...

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  7. The Write GirlJanuary 1, 2013 at 6:06 PM

    What a range of emotions. I enjoyed the dichotomy of his and her feelings.

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  8. BGTJanuary 1, 2013 at 10:40 PM

    Love explained in few words! Nice one Ruchi :)

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  9. Harshad MehtaJanuary 2, 2013 at 3:14 AM

    Excellent work here.
    Last two lines makes me think about LOVE.

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  10. Lady In ReadJanuary 2, 2013 at 3:00 PM

    neither a dream nor reality - perfect:)

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  11. ND MitchellJanuary 2, 2013 at 4:00 PM

    Nice sense of conflict here. Enjoyed reading this.

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  12. Jennifer WagnerJanuary 2, 2013 at 4:21 PM

    I felt the pull of warring emotions as I read this. Well done.

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  13. GraceJanuary 2, 2013 at 5:29 PM

    The He and She versions were interesting & contrasting of reality ~ Good one ~

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  14. UnknownJanuary 3, 2013 at 11:55 AM

    So much emotion in your poem - I guess that's reality!

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  15. rainboyJanuary 4, 2013 at 7:58 AM

    love the way you've played with words here ...
    tc and have a nice day

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  16. Writefully YoursJanuary 4, 2013 at 9:05 AM

    very interesting way of writing...makes the reader stress on every line and read it more than once...good piece!

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  17. renateJanuary 4, 2013 at 9:58 AM

    A nice way to leave the year 2012:) Beautiful words! Happy new year:)

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  18. SandeeJanuary 5, 2013 at 2:56 PM

    Very well done. Very well.

    Have a terrific day and a happy new year filled with good health, much happiness and tons of prosperity. :)

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  19. JackJanuary 6, 2013 at 5:22 AM

    Ruchi,

    Read 2 poems now. Both show little dark side of love. Hope it is just creation of mind.

    Take care

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  20. kalaJanuary 20, 2013 at 8:07 PM

    Loved the rhyming and cute one i say :)

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  21. anilkurup59February 28, 2013 at 1:46 AM

    This is the third poem of yours I have gone through at the trot.
    I like this specially. The ask in the end - it is different to each. But perhaps it is an illusion?

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  22. Maggie Patti Barbara Frankford-WaltonJanuary 15, 2015 at 7:20 PM

    the opposite party will always play different roles.
    powerful thinking.

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  23. Maggie Patti Barbara Frankford-WaltonJanuary 15, 2015 at 7:20 PM

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